The bar chart shows the difficulties people have when they move to a new country and how the problems vary according to people’s ages.
The greatest problem for young
people
aged 18 to 34 is managing budget
, a problem experienced by 34 Correct article usage
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people
in this
age
group. However
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per cent
people
over 55 face financial problems
.
Both of the older age
groups find it hard to deal with health problems
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age
group finds this
easier, and the percentage who have problems
taking care of their health is lower, at 32 percent
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In contrast
to their healthcare difficulties, only 2 percent
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people
in the oldest age
group have trouble with their children’s education. However
, this
figure is much higher in parents aged 35 to 54 who struggle to find suitable schools, at 19 percent
.
In general, all Change the spelling
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age
groups experience the same problems
to some extent, but the percentage of middle age
people
who find health care difficult is much higher than the others.Submitted by Thanh
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