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Som epeople think that public libraries or no longer important while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#som #epeople #libraries
The role of public
libreries
a building that houses a collection of books and other materials
libraries
 has changed dramatically since the introduction of the computer and online stored data. While many people consider
book
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the book
books
 and libraries
a
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an
obselete
no longer in use
obsolete
, some believe it is an essential tool
in
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to
 maintain our culture and history. According to many people, including several leading
authers
writes (books or stories or articles or the like) professionally (for pay)
authors
others
, the massive use electronic
book
 use
have
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has
 lead to a substantial decrease in printed literature and, as a consequence, there is just no justification for public libraries no more. More so, most of the previous publications are now online and, as a
consequences
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consequence
, readers today have no difficulty finding classical literature.
Acording
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A cording
 to
this
view the
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view, the
 government should close public libraries and direct
this
 funding to support new
upcommong
of the relatively near future
upcoming
writters
writes (books or stories or articles or the like) professionally (for pay)
writers
riders
readers
 in the form of the grants and publicity.
In contrast
, some people believe public libraries are an invaluable part of our community and
sociaty
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
 because it collects and saves all of our culture and history into a single place. It
represent
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represents
 a monument of our past and
sociaty
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
 and, by saving all the data and allowing us to
accesss
the right to enter
access
 it freely, it helps to educate us.
lastly
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Lastly
, to many people the ability to hold a
book
 in your hand, smell the pages and feels them is an integral part of reading, which
electornic
of or relating to electronics; concerned with or using devices that operate on principles governing the behavior of electrons
electronic
 reading can not provide. In my opinion, public libraries are an
assssential
absolutely necessary; vitally necessary
essential
 part of our city
vire
the event of something burning (often destructive)
fire
 and should be maintained.
Personally I
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Personally, I
 will
allways
at all times; all the time and on every occasion
always
preffer
like better; value more highly
prefer
prefers
prepare
 to
enetr
to come or go into
enter
 a
librariy
a building that houses a collection of books and other materials
library
 and hold a
book
 in my hands. The
intimicy
close or warm friendship
intimacy
 of reading a
book
 and feeling the pages is precious and no computer can provide me the same feelings. In conclusion,
although
 the electronic literature is gaining popularity I strongly believe public libraries should be kept. To me they represent one of the main building blocks of our community.
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