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The table displays trends concerning the amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Five Major Types of Fast Food Eaten in Melbourne (units) 2005Present2025 Hamburgers403851 Fried Chicken353745 Salads51541 Fried Rice699 Noodles689

The table displays trends concerning the amounts of fast food consumed in Melbourne. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Five Major Types of Fast Food Eaten in Melbourne (units) 2005Present2025 Hamburgers403851 Fried Chicken353745 Salads51541 Fried Rice699 Noodles689
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The given table describes the information about the five major fast foods that are consumed in Melbourne from the past 2005 to
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the present
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present
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the present
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 and
predictable
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 2025.
Overall
,what stands out from the graph is that
,
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apply
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 Hamburgers
is
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are
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 the most significant
item
 eaten by most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people and Noodles
is
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 the least significant
item
.
Firstly
, Hamburgers
is
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are
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 the major type of fast food eaten in Melbourne with 40
units
 in the past 2005.
However
 it
then
 gradually decreased to 38
units
 at present before increasing to 51
units
 in the future (2025). Fried chicken is the
second highest
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 snack
item
 eaten in Melbourne with 37
units
 at present and 45
units
 after 6 years.
Secondly
,
salad's
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salad
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is
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was
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 the least significant
item
 eaten in the past with 5
units
 and it
rosed
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rose
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 significantly to 41
units
 after 2 decades.
Moreover
, fried rice and Noodles are
second
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the second
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 least items eaten with 6
units
 in the past and 9
units
 after 20 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words item, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 4 times.
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