The diagram illustrates how steel rods are manufactured in furniture industry.

The diagram illustrates how steel rods are manufactured in furniture industry.
The given process diagram provides information about steel
rods
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rod
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manufacturing in the industry which makes furniture.
Overall
, the process
consist
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of eleven stages, beginning with
processing
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the processing
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of raw material and ending up with
inspection
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an inspection
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of
end
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product. First of all, raw materials
such
as iron ore, yellow ore and carbon etc are mixed together in a container.
Then
,
this
raw material mixture is subjected to
high
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temperature of about 1300 to 1500 C for melting.
This
molten mass is
then
transferred to
smelting
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the smelting
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cabin for its refinement. In the
next
stage,
condescent
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condescend
candescent
metal is allowed to pour into
ingot
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the ingot
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machine. Ingot pour is
further
attached to a cooling container and the metal is passed through nozzles to strand casting. The temperature of
metal
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the metal
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dropped to 60-100 C at
this
level.
Subsequently
, these
coldcstrands
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cold strands
of metals are allowed to pass through rollers and heating
machine
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machines
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. After hearing, surface checks of these metal
rods
are done through measuring automation. After measurement,
cutter
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the cutter
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cut down the
rods
to
appropriate
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the appropriate
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size and these
standard sized
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standard-sized
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metal
rods
are stamped in
next
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the next
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step.
Finally
, at the
last
stage final inspection is done for
release
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the release
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of
end
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product.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rods with synonyms.
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