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The best way to help developing countries is to give them financial aid. Write an essay either agreeing or disagreeing with this statement. Suggest alternatives to this policy.

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In
this
 rapidly changing world a myriad of developing countries receive
aids
Suggestion
aid
 from various financial institutions.
Although
this
 assistance plays a vital role
for
Suggestion
in
 these countries, I think it is not the best manner and there are some other methods which I explain below. In the
first
 place, financial assistance to these countries seems to make them dependent on others. These organizations have a right to claim their share of the financial aid to a developing
country
 when that
country
 develops.
Secondly
, these funds can be squandered on the anomalous purposes,
such
 as to buy land in another
country
, to open cafes or game clubs that are not very considerable for the public, and so on. Rather, it should be better spent on the poor public services.
Then
 the state may develop. Let's look through the alternatives of
this
.
Firstly
, the government should control the effectiveness of these funds.
This
 will reduce the amount of aimless spend and increase to attend at the public attention. The other method is to build schools, colleges and universities in those countries. Since, if
educational system
Suggestion
the educational system
 of government is good, its development will be
also
 good. To sum up, financial aid to developing countries can make them dependent on others and even worsen the development of the
country
.
Therefore
, I believe that other methods should be used.

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