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in some countries it is illegal for companies to reject job applicants for their age is this a positive or negative development ?

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In general, a company requires experienced,
hard_working
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hardworking
 and enthusiastic adults.
However
, in a few areas around the world, companies are not allowed to refuse employees based on their age. Despite
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 fact, I think
this
 is a negative development because work vacancies should be given to adults
as well as
elderly
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the elderly
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 shall be retired and relax for the rest of their lives. First and foremost l, these industries
needs
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 skilled, energetic and smart people to work with them. Who might encourage
to
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the
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daily growth in the required field, which is only possible if you have workers without limitation in their capacities
.
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For instance
, being a representative is merely suitable for the age group of twentieth.
Otherwise
, the job’s responsibilities cannot be fulfilled.
As a result
, companies ought to fill job vacancies with deserved applicants.
Furthermore
, when a job is given to an old worker, they will need more rest during the period of their duty as
elderly
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 might have some
health related
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 issues that require regular breaks. Hypertension,
for example
, is one of the common heart diseases among aged people.
Consequently
, it
will
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 be much better if older ages could spend the remaining of their lives relaxing, improving their health and exercising. In conclusion,
although
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apply
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in some
part
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parts
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around
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of
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 the
world
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 industries are not permitted
in rejecting
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to reject
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 employees depending merely on their ages. I strongly believe that
this
 is a negative development and
elderly
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the elderly
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 need more rest.
On the other hand
, filling job offers with young and motivated applicants has a positive effect
in
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 the growth of the company.
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