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The pie charts show the proportion of transport in main bridge in the UK in three years

The pie charts show the proportion of transport in main bridge in the UK in three years
#show #proportion #transport #bridge #uk #three #years
The rendered pie three pie charts illustrate the percentage of various
type
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 of
transports
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transport
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 which were used
in
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main
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 bridge in the UK in three different years.
To begin
 with,
it is clear that
 in the initial
year
, people gave more
prefrence
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preference
 to recreational
vehicles
 was, accounted for 56%,
whereas
 private
vehicles
 stood at 22% as against to public transport
vehicles
.
However
, commercial
vehicles
 were less popular in the UK.
Besides
, the maximum proportion of private
vehicles
was
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used by
public
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the public
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 was registered
in
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 56% in 1985, which was
equal
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 percentage of recreational
vehicles
 in the former
year
.
However
, people used lorries and other commercial
vehicles
 and public transport
vehicles
 were 26% and 14%, respectively.
Moreover
, just 4% of recreational
vehicles
was
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 used
by
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.
Furthermore
, in the
last
year
, it was witnessed that private
vehicles
 reached
at
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74%, which was the highest proportion of
vehicles
in
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this
year
 by
public
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the public
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.
However
, lorries and other commercial
vehicles
 became less popular
in
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this
year
, recorded in 12%.
Moreover
, the percentage of recreational
vehicles
 was little increased at 9%. To wrap up, it is lucid that private transportation was more popular in other years except
first
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year
.
However
, recreational
vehicles
 were more popular in the first
year
 among people.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, moreover".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, vehicles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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