The line graph below shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meat in a European country from 1979 to 2004
The graph illustrates the variety of meat
such
as chicken, beef
, lamb and fish eaten by a particular person in a week throughout
1979 until 2004 in a European country.
Change preposition
from
Overall
, European people, mainly used chicken in their dishes, however
lamb and Add the comma(s)
,however
beef
is
less likely to be consumed over the Change the verb form
are
23 year
period. People who ate fish relatively remained steady until 2004.
The most consumed meat is chicken accounting Add a hyphen
23-year
from
150g per week in 1979 and markedly grew Change preposition
for
until
250g in 2004. Change preposition
to
Whereas
fish that is
constantly used in the
household food has a starting average of about 60g and insignificantly rose and fell that reached over 50g Correct article usage
apply
at
2004.
Change preposition
in
However
, beef
was widely utilized as the main dish in 1979 which has around 220g in a week and continuously declined that gathered
Wrong verb form
gathering
at
105g after 23 years. Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
, lamb acquired 150g last
1979 with the same trend as with the beef
that is
considerably declining over 2004.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beef, g with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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