the line graph below shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meat in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
The line graph illustrates the
consumption
of fish and meat consumed by the residents in
a European nation between 1979 and 2004. Change preposition
of
Overall
, chicken
increased in popularity of consumption
while
other sectors reduced over the period. The unit is measured in gram
per person per week.
In detail, in 1979, roughly 220 Fix the agreement mistake
grams
grams
were a
beef Correct article usage
apply
consumer
and accounted for the most popular meat compared to that of others. Fix the agreement mistake
consumers
Moreover
, about halved of that number were
consumed Unnecessary verb
apply
chicken
and lamb (150 grams
). People Consumed fish only 60 grams
in the initial year. In the following decade, beef consumer
fluctuated over the period Fix the agreement mistake
consumers
while
decreasing in lamb and increased
in Wrong verb form
increasing
chicken
.
After the year 1989, inhabitants preferred chicken
in their meal
and it surged to about 250 Fix the agreement mistake
meals
grams
in 2004. However
, beef and lamb consumption
reduced remarkably to about 120 grams
and 70 grams
consecutively. However
, the popularity of fish consumption
remained almost constant throughout the period.Submitted by fernnizz.r on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, chicken, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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