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Fewer and fewer people walk on a daily basis. What are the reasons and how to encourage them to spend their time walking?

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It is true that, currently, fewer people walk than in the past. Obviously,
this
 is because of car dependency and lack of facilities for walking;
however
,
this
 can be effectively overcome by educating and constructing people and jogging tracks, respectively. One of the main reasons for minimum walking is that people prefer to commute by their personal vehicles, which is convenient and affordable, especially, those who live far away from their job site.
This
 dependency can result in poor physical exercise in
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ong run.
For instance
, nowadays, either company vehicles or public transport use to commute on a regular basis, rarely they walk to work. Apart from
this
,
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glamour of jogging is fading since it is often considered to do only out of
necessary
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 rather than for just fun.
Finally
, sprawling suburbs makes jogging impossible as pedestrian hardly get minimum space to walk.
Nevertheless
, it has been proven that by following set of measures
this
 situation can be changed. The one obvious method is that informing public about incredible health benefits of walking can bring to humans,
for example
, lowering cholesterol level, burning body fat and keeping both body and mind fit. Another point is to consider here is that the government ought to make certain constructive plans to build some infrastructures which motivate citizens to actively walk every day. For
this
, can build jogging tracks in the parks and separate track even on the public road. Even though walking is a good health habit, which is
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 by the present generation, the government action to revive
this
 can be fruitful,
that is
 by informing the society about its merits as well as providing better facilities to adopt
this
 in their day to day life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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