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Many people believe that formal “pen and paper” examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievement. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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In the modern era, an increase in the number of examinations is the major concern across the countries. With each passing day, students spend a lot of time
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 their lives complicated, there is enough chance for improvement. Significant numbers of candidates do react differently because of pressure. The present essay will discuss the topic in a broader manner.
Firstly
, an examination holds important
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 value. Pen and paper pattern is used widely in most countries now. They are a sign of
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. They must ensure every generation has easy access to them.
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, an individual system in Japan. But undoubtedly, one of the benefits of
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 is that they are less stressful. The computer-based system is paperless and effective.
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, there are changes in policies. The computer-based test is an area where governments and private groups or individuals can share responsibility. Students are more likely to suffer stress
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 at a great level. Since developed nations have always been far ahead in terms of
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. In fact mostly to get credit for it.
For example
, in the USA teachers do spend more time in school counselling. In conclusion, even though time changes.
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 people may vary in their opinions. I think only positive elements can bring more benefits.
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, teachers and students
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play a vital role in tracking
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 subject. Many people believe that formal “pen and paper” examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievement.
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, the computer is the best way to do it.
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task response
The essay does not adequately address the topic. The arguments lack clarity and coherence. The examples and explanations provided do not effectively support the main points.
coherence and cohesion
The essay lacks a logical structure, and there is a need for more cohesive linking of ideas throughout the essay. The introduction and conclusion are present but need improvement in terms of clarity and relevance to the topic.

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