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SCHOOL TEACHERS USED TO BE THE SOURCE OF INFORMATION. HOWEVER, SOME PEOPLE ARUE THAT TEACHERS ARE NOT AS IMPORTANT AS BEFORE AS THE INCREASING VARIETY OF INFORMATION RESOURCES. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE

#school #teachers #source #information #people #arue #variety #resources
AS TECHNOLOGY IS FLOURISHING BY LEAPS AND BOUNDS, A FAIR NUMBER OF PEOPLE ARE CONVINCED THAT EDUCATORS WHO WERE ONCE THE PRIME SOURCE OF
INFORMATION
 MAY
HAD
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 BEEN SUPERSEDED BY FAR MORE EFFICIENT AVENUES
SUCH
 AS THE INTERNET, COMPUTERS SYSTEMS OR SOCIAL MEDIA. I DO NOT COMPLETELY AGREE WITH
THIS
 STATEMENT, AS I BELIEVE THAT TEACHER'S ROLE IN
INFORMATION
 DISSEMINATION WILL REMAIN EQUALLY IMPORTANT AS THEY WERE BEFORE.
TO BEGIN
 WITH, THE INTERNET AND THE SOCIAL MEDIA, INDEED, ARE A CORNUCOPIA OF
INFORMATION
. THEY OFFER AN ENDLESS AMOUNT OF
INFORMATION
 FAR BEYOND A STUDENT NEEDS.
HOWEVER
, HOW THESE DATA WILL BE INTERPRETED WITHIN THE LIMITS OF ONE'S COMPREHENSION SKILLS IS EVERY TEACHER'S PRIMARY ROLE- A ROLE THAT ANY SORTS OF
INFORMATION
 RESOURCES CAN NEVER REPLACE.
FOR INSTANCE
,
ALTHOUGH
 DIGITAL COURSEBOOKS CAN NOW BE DOWNLOADED EASILY ONLINE, IT WILL ALWAYS REQUIRE A PRECEPTOR TO EXPLAIN FULLY THE TOPIC ACCORDING TO LEARNER'S COGNITION LEVEL.
ADDITIONALLY
, WHILE THE LIKES OF FACEBOOK, YOUTUBE OR INSTAGRAM IS INUNDATED WITH TUTORIALS, ONLINE CLASSES AND NARRATIVE LEARNING VIDEOS, THESE LEARNINGS AND WHO WERE TEACHING ARE TEACHERS THEMSELVES!. TO EXEMPLIFY, PAID OR UNPAID IELTS LESSONS UPLOADED ONLINE ARE MADE BY CERTIFIED ENGLISH INSTRUCTORS.
FINALLY
, EDUCATIONALISTS ARE THE ONLY ONES WHO COULD EDIFY LEARNERS ABOUT BASIC HUMAN SKILLS
SUCH
 AS CRITICAL SOLVING PROBLEM SKILLS, MULTI-TASKING AND TIME MANAGEMENT, NOR CAN BECOME A ROLE MODEL OF INTRINSIC HUMAN VIRTUES
SUCH
 AS EMPATHY, CO-RESPONSIBILITY AND RESPECT.
THIS
 CRITICAL
INFORMATION
 CAN NEVER BE TAUGHT BY EVEN TODAY'S MOST SOPHISTICATED SOURCE OF SAPIENCE. TO RECAPITULATE, DESPITE THE GROWING NUMBER OF AVAILABLE
INFORMATION
 RESOURCES AND AVENUES TO ACCESS IT, EDUCATORS WILL REMAIN AS AN INVALUABLE SOURCE OF LEARNING.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Information technology
  • Access
  • Independent learning
  • Structured learning
  • Guidance
  • Expertise
  • Moral values
  • Critical thinking
  • Facilitator
  • Complex information landscapes
  • Emotional support
  • Motivation
  • Discern
  • Mentorship
  • Synthesizing
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