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Caring for children is an important thing of the society it is suggested that all mothers and fathers should be required to take child care training courses to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often said that
parents
 should take child care courses in order to raise their youth in an appropriate way.In
this
 essay, I tend to discuss the benefits that society may acquire by
this
 process and it is my personal belief that if
such
 courses would readily more available,it would greatly enhance our community.
Firstly
 .it is vital that we appreciate the importance of the family as the main source of learning behaviours for youngsters.
In addition
,youth mostly learn the pattern of behaviour by looking at their
parents
 and hearing what they say ,
therefore
,it is so important for
parents
 to learn how they should
act
 in front of their
children
 .
Moreover
,a study which has been conducted at Harvard University indicates that a youngster's brain is like a sponge and absorb things very fast and keeps them for their entire life.
Therefore
,bad-behaved
parents
 can lead youngsters to become criminals or deal with psychological problems.
Consequently
 , those kids can undermine society in a foreseeable future.
However
,some people would argue that
parents
 do not need to learn how to
act
 with their kids and they can learn youngster caring naturally by practising with their
children
 .But,
this
 is my belief that not all
parents
 trying to
act
 well with their kids ,
for instance
, not many years ago in Iran
parents
 used to do physical punishment their
children
 due to a lack of knowledge of how they should brought-up youngster and by trying to do what their own
parents
 did to them .
Therefore
 ,
children
 can become victims of their
parents
 and experience some mental problems when growing up. In conclusion,it seems to me that it is essential for a family to learn how to
act
 with their
children
 because not only it's going to affect their
children
's future but
also
 secure
children
 from some wrong action
such
 as physical punishments.
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