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People no longer use newspapers and television because the Internet plays the same role. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

#people #newspapers #television #internet #role
In
this
 fast world, airways are the most convenient mode to commute. It cuts down long journeys to short and
reliable
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.
However
, with all perks, they charged an exorbitant amount of fare from passengers.
Flights
 have become reasonably cheaper during the global pandemic. Worldwide, employees have been laid off from their jobs as companies were left with no salaries to pay.
Moreover
, businesses were running into losses. It is evident that India was one of the most affected countries all over the world. Not only people lost their jobs, but families
also
 lost their sole earners. Many non-resident Indians had to return back to their respective native places. Considering
this
 tragic situation, aeroplane companies reduced their costs so that passengers could travel without keeping fare charges in mind.
Furthermore
,
flights
 were cancelled in few countries which led to tremendous losses to the
airline
 industry. Reducing fares was a huge impact on the
airline
 sector's surplus. Ground-level crew, air hostesses, and other service professionals were unpaid which resulted in a higher attrition rate in the
airline
 sector.
Nevertheless
, when the situation came under control and
flights
 resumed, airways started encouraging more commuters to commute via
flights
 with reasonable ticket charges. What is more, tourism
also
 resumed and
this
 was even beneficial for airlines. People who used to travel via trains or buses were motivated to pay a slightly higher price to make their journey less irksome and exhausting. With discounted prices, tourists had to compromise with their complimentary service
such
 as meals during
flights
. they were delighted with fare charges and health precautions in flight. To conclude,
this
 alteration is a boon for travellers yet it is abortive for the
airline
 sector.
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