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One way to reduce the problem of traffic congestion is by increasing the tax on private vehicles. Do you think this is a feasible solution?

#traffic #congestion #tax #vehicles
Nowadays, every country is facing multiple issues due to heavy traffic on roads and authorities believe that enhancing tax on personal vehicles might reduce the purchasing power of
customer
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customers
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;
consequently
, congestion might be reduced. I strongly disagree with
this
 opinion, as it might adversely impact the economy as well as
the
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society.
Firstly
, we will discuss the implications of burdening the buyers with heavy duties and
secondly
, we will explain its impact on
financial
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the financial
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 position of corporate.
To begin
 with, 90
percent
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per cent
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 population in our country belongs to
mediocre
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the mediocre
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 or lower class,
hence
, either they can’t afford it or buy it on loan from
bank
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a bank
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.
Rising
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 tariff on
non commercial
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 vehicles is definitely going to hamper their pockets. It has become a necessity, as it is not practically possible to do every task on
bicycle
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a bicycle
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.
Additionally
, it is quite helpful in case of medical emergencies.
For example
, my
neighbor
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 got badly injured and needed urgent help, whereas,
ambulance
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an ambulance
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 was not available due to
heavy
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the heavy
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 rush,
hence
 I carried him to
hospital
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the hospital
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 in my car.
Thus
, it has become an integral part of our life;
moreover
,
government
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the government
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 should strengthen the traffic system rather than increasing the cess.
On the other hand
, the agenda of the rulers to enhance the government duties will negatively impact the automobile industry. It is a
billion dollar
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 industry;
however
,
this
 small decision might be disastrous for their sales. Reduced sales will strike a hammer on profits plus the company will certainly go for
cost cutting
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cost-cutting
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.
For example
, Ford in
USA
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 closed one of their
plant
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; as their sales dipped due to heavy duties imposed by
government
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the government
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.
Therefore
, administrators should focus on creating awareness among citizens to either use public vehicles or to start
car pooling
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carpooling
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instead
 of levying hefty cess on that. To recapitulate, making a thing expensive is not a logical approach to prevent people from buying; alternatively, building infrastructure as well as incentivizing usage of public transport would be a better option.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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