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Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are marries or single. some people say this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Job
 seekers are eventually asked to feed in their personal details by the prospective employers at the time when they are filling in the
job
 application.
This
 is considered
as
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essential
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an essential
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 and needful piece of
information
 by some
people
, whereas others opine
this
 as irrelevant.
This
 can be considered differently from
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group
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a group
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 of
people
. I actually
regards
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this
 to be useful from my point of view and I would back up my statement in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, It helps the employers to screen the candidate from the pool of
job
 applicants. When a
person
apply
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 for a
job
, there are certain specifics
which
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that
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 an organisation may be keen
into
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 before employing that
person
.
For instance
,
Married
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a Married
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person
 may not be suitable for doing
night
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 shift as
this
 would alter their family wellbeing.
Secondly
, Certain jobs require
passion
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a passion
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for
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it
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. These peculiar likes and dislikes of a
person
differentiates
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 them from others.
For example
, If a
job
 seeker
have
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 a keen interest in arts and crafts they will be well suited for
creative
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the creative
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job
 field, as they have passion for it.
Similarly
, Organisations keep a track record of every employee that they employ, which requires their personal
information
 to be disclosed.
However
, there are certain
people
 who
views
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 that it
is
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as
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 not essential. They consider it as
breach
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a breach
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 of their privacy, which most of them do not want to disclose. For saying, some folks do not want to disclose their marital status.
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 they consider that sharing personal
information
 has nothing to do with matching
of
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apply
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a
person
 with a
job
 role. As
this
 could never help a firm to determine their
caliber
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. To conclude,
this
 is a perspective based
choices
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choice
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. Some find it
offending
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, stating their own reasonable judgement but some view it as
perfectly
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a perfectly
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 natural process of
record keeping
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 or track recording details of a
person
. I completely support the latter group of
people
 and would stand by sharing personal
information
to
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 the employer, as it does not harm me in
anyway
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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