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Describe a period of time from your studies that was the most difficult for you so far. You should say: •When it was •Why was it hard •What you were doing at that time

#period #time #studies #•when #•why #•what
I would like to talk about my
last
 secondary school year. That year should be the most crucial throughout my scholar career, because I need remarkable scholar performance to be able to enroll in the college of my dreams: dentistry. I have to say It was really challenge and stressful
due to
 enormous amounts of assignments I had to do, and to put me in a worst position I had exams and lecture every single Monday.... so I studied hard and non-stop, having no time to goof around/
while
 away ... I spend my own energy and my entire week on scheduled classes and lab works and if you’re thinking that I was the right to rest during the weekend, unfortunately, you’re wrong. At that time, I had to prepare my presentations and focus on my weekly tests which I had every Monday. Because of
this
 insane routine I got sick, I suffer from anxiety and many episodes of migraine, and that’s why I meet my supportive and amazing psychologist which is my best friend now! After all, my efforts were not in vain... I passed all the exams well and was admitted to the university of my dream and the most important Life gave me a special friend! What did I learn with that? Nothing is forever and I believe that every challenge come to us with a special gift: we just need to stay calm and recognize that. As for me, every teacher should be able to catch student's attention. It is very important to make all subject interesting, using interactive methods
such
 as lab experiments, or funny competitions to get the best results from each student...
Also
, teacher should be a listen and helpful person, able to understand fears or traumas, supporting students to surpass them, seemed a psychologist.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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