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Developments of science and technology have caused environmental problems. Some people think that a simpler way of life will protect the environment, while others believe that science and technology can solve environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some proponents say that
simple
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a simple
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 way of living should be adopted so that the environmental issues caused by the progression of
technology
 and
science
 could be prevented.
However
, in my
opinion
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 advanced technological and scientific features can help to combat environmental deterioration, but the idea of going back to simple living is not acceptable.
Firstly
, the advancement in
science
 and research results in the production of various innovative alternatives of daily use
products
 which were considered as the major pollutants.
For instance
, the use of plastic bags, cups, straws
are
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 replaced by paper-based
products
, which can degrade easily.
Additionally
,
technology
 has introduced various recycling plants worldwide. Plastic and other pollutants, which take years to degrade, are now being recycled to manufacture various useful
products
.
For Example
, a renowned clothing brand Zara sells clothing made of
the
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apply
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fiber
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fibre
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 obtained from plastic bottles. The opponents say that technological advancement brings new
products
 to the world, which results in opening new industries and manufacturing units. It leads to an increase in waste production.
For example
, in the
last
 decade, 100 tons of mobile phone-related waste
products
 was extracted out of the Dal lake in Kashmir while cleaning. The fact that
science
 and
technology
has
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 caused more environmental issues is undoubtedly undeniable, but the idea of adapting
simple
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to simple
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 life is impossible. It is extremely hard for humankind to leave the comfort of
modern
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the modern
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 technological world. In
conclusion
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 I believe that mankind has come too far to start living the simple life again. The idea of utilizing
science
 and
technology
 to prevent environmental pollution is more feasible.
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