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Many believe that it is important to protect all wild animals, while others think that it is important to protect some, not all of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
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 diverse ecosystem, each species has its significant value. There is an argument on the protection of wildlife in which few suggest concentrating on the preservation of a few groups would
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 sufficient
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,
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 others support the point of holistic wildlife conservation. I would recommend protection on
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 scale.
This
 essay will give an insight into my approach. capricious weather conditions have led to the extension of a few species and forced a few others on the verge of extension. Some people suggest protecting these endangered animals by taking necessary steps, in order to balance the ecosystem. A case in point is a recent activity taken by the Punjab government to restore dolphin habitat in the Ganga
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. Though environment activists lauded
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 ideology on a primary level,they brought up the different view
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 prosperity, which is taking into account the entire wildlife. The reasons stated for
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 are everything in
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 complex environment is interdependent.If we consider Punjab's approach, it was not successful to the desired level despite spending a fortune
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 it because though the river is cleaned, the government failed to maintain optimal food levels for the habitat as the population of small fish is not taken into account. one variable is affected by a food crisis because of the loss of the other. We can conclude that, for effective balance and diversification, All living creatures need to be taken into account. It is just a staircase, if one step is damaged there will be discontinuity and slow deterioration of the entire pyramid.
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Ensure that you fully address the prompt and provide a balanced discussion of both views. Expand on your ideas to provide a more comprehensive response, and provide more specific examples to support your points.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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