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For the past year you have been a member of a local club. Now want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter:

#year #member #club #membership #secretary
Dear
Mr.
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Joe, My name is Elyn and I am a member of the Royal
Club
 since 2015, my member ID is 1122. I am writing
this
 letter to inform you regarding the termination of my membership from the Royal
Club
 in London, due to
the
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personal reasons. As I mentioned, I was a regular member of
this
 community for a
quiet
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 long time but past
one
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year I was busy with my work and could not make it regularly to the
club
. I hold a premium membership card which
i
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 was purchased at the time of the joining.
Initial
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 payment of $300 was done by cash and later every month $150 was debited from my account. If you want I can submit the receipts and bank transactions history for reference. Apart from
this
, I would like to express my sincere thanks to the
club
's fitness centre and the coach. I have benefited a lot from doing daily exercises and the fitness equipment is really useful and
a
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 premium quality. The weight loss program conducted at
club
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 was successful for me and
i
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loss
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 almost 10 kgs all thanks to the fitness team.
Moreover
, I gained friends from
this
 community and we are still in touch. It is really
disheartened
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 to discontinue from
this
 esteemed
club
however
 I need to relocate to my new hometown Stanford which is about 100 km far from
this
 place. I hope the Royal
club
 will soon open its new venture in my new hometown. If you need any additional information please feel free to contact me. Looking forward to hearing from you. Regards, Elyn
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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