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Some believe the primary purpose of museums is to entertain people, while others believe their purpose is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Museums have always been a
place
 where history resides. Its main purpose has always been to a
place
 where people can learn and entertain themselves which can be
also
 called a
place
 of info-entertainment and not a
place
 where people get bored.
Although
, it is sometimes seen by some individuals as a
place
 where they can entertain themselves by looking at old artefacts, like
for example
 I have seen a movie where named Night at the
museum
 where all the artefacts of the
museum
 come to life and enjoy themselves, which I believe was made by keeping in mind that how can a
museum
 be a fun
place
 for children so that they can encourage the children to visit the
museum
 and if I had the opportunity in my childhood where I could have visited the
museum
 where I could have learned as well as had a little fun in the
museum
, it would have been just amazing.
Furthermore
, if museums are only considered as a
place
 where an individual can just learn and educate himself/herself
then
, we are not only creating a
place
 where people get bored but
also
 are creating an environment where under the age children may never visit the
museum
 as they will always believe that it is a
place
 where some collection of old things placed and we will only get boredom. So in conclusion, I believe the
museum
 should not be a
place
 whose motive is to just impart education but it should
also
 be a
place
 where education is endorsed with a pinch of entertainment.
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