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The main purpose of public libraries is to provide books and theyshouldn’t waste their limited resources and space on providingexpensive hi-tech media such as computer software, videos andDVDs.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#purpose #libraries #books #theyshouldn’t #waste #resources #space #providingexpensive #media #computer #software #videos #anddvds
Public
libraries
 have a huge responsibility to maintain the collections as
a
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a book
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books
 rather than
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 all the advanced levels of technology devices or software. Many believe
information
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the information
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 can only find from the internet but the library is the only proof that
books
 are giving more adventure experience than
a
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 e-book can give. I totally agree that
libraries
 should give the
first
 priority to store the
books
 but not just collecting hardware like computers,
tvs
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TVs
 and big projectors. To make sure the atmosphere of the study place remains calm and less noise pollution,
that
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every Liberians should be aware of the items that going to belong inside the reading place does not make any disturbance or diversion to the readers. Reading
books
 is one of the good exercises for the brain and it is scientifically proved that's looking at the hard copy of a book can give a more good impact to the brain and inner
piece
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.
However
, the current society is immersed in technology everywhere they see, coming to a library is to see the collection that they couldn't find from another e-book. Something like
local
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a local
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book
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books
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 or inside town magazines can only be found at
that local area
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that local area library
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libraries
 but not from the internet. At the
last
, people coming to the library by seeking
for
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a
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calmness and a for to get the environment vibes to kick start their days sometimes. It is many peoples hobbies to visit
libraries
 and to spend some quality time, ruining it will very developed technology will only divert the readers.
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