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Some people think that hosting international sports events may be beneficial for a country. Discuss both views.

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Olympic
football
 game makes the
the
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public known for the city in recent years. A vast number of
people
 have a variant sight opinion about the advantages may give to the
country
 when hosting one of
the
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global events
such
 as sports.
This
 essay will discuss both arguments and provide that
with
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more detail and examples. Hosting international events can create many negative influences
such
 as pollution and expensively problems. The world cup
of
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the
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football
 match
lead
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 to causing traffic.
Firstly
, that may happen when smoking or have cars with a huge number of visitors come to support their
football
 teams than
celberating
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celebrating
 via fireworks.
Secondly
,
to find
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a place
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place
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 for tourists to stay through
olympic
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 times, it may cause to rise sharply
the
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rent
of
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housing price
also
the
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food prices. For
this
 reason, that will affect directly local
people
 living game
Then
, may not be able to purchase some specific type of food supplies.
On the other hand
,
people
 think that hosting international sports events may give
great
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 opportunity for a
country
 to keep growing and
development
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in
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invariant
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variant
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sector
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sectors
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. To provide that, by
example
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 given with sports competition
such
 as swimming or
football
 and tennis...etc. The city that holds
this
 game will be famous across the world.
Then
, that
award
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country
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 chance to come
foreign
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to foreign
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people
 to taste their
tradition
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 food and know more about their cultures and traditions. Meanwhile, during these competitions holds in the
country
 across
this
 way will aid to an
increase
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 economy sector which is made from the payment of
transporition
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transportation
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 and rents. To conclude, both sides of view
has
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 a special point
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throughout
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through out
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 their situation in life and the
poistion
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position
 of financial.
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