Some people claim that not enough waste from homes is recycled and that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Every day global warming is increasing and air, sea and land are getting polluted. Many
people
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that
,
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this
due to not enough
people
are recycle
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are recycling
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the
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waste.
In
addition
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they
also
think that government should make
law
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for
recycle
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waste from homes. I agree with
this
statement and
in
addition
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not only
law
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but
also
they should give rewards for recycling.
To begin
with,
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are many things at home that we are not recycling
it
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, like newspaper, paper gift wrapper and notebook or
magazine
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. Normally
people
just throw that into
trash
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after the usage, and as
a
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more trees are
cutting
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down to create new paper. If
people
recycle the paper, it can save lots of trees.
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, similar
for
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plastic,
like
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empty soft drink
bottle
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bottles
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, mike
carton
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and plastic
bags
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they throw
away
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them away
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into
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trash
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after the use
instead
of
recycle
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it
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them
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.
Furthermore
,
government
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should create
the
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laws for recyclable trash at home. Like
People
should separate the recyclable and non-recyclable in different bins. and if anyone fails to do it, there should be some penalty for it. They should
also
give some
reward
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for
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who
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those who
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do recycle properly,
this
will encourage them and create a good habit. In conclusion,
People
not recycling enough from their
home
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like
papers
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paper
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and plastics. Government should impose
law
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a law
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for recycling and
also
give
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the incentive
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incentive
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incentives
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to encourage
for
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more
people
for it.
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