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Task 1 academic The cart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in england and Wales between 1918 and 2011 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant

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 of families in England and Wales that
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 or
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 accommodation from 1918 to 2011. Overall, it can be clearly seen that in
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 1918 had the lowest
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 in the rented accommodation, in
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 2001 had the lowest
percentage
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 1918 had the highest
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 1918
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 about 20%, while in
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 1939 increased to
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exceed
 30% and continued to be
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the
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 1953,
then
 in
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 1961 increased gradually to reach 40%,
then
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 1971 reached 50%, after
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that
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 1981 to be 60% followed by its highest peak in
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 2001 and in the
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 became around 60%. On
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the rented houses started with
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 highest peak in
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 1918 with
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the percentage
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 of near to 80,
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 1971, and after that started to fluctuate in the years between 1981 to 2011 to start with 40% and end with about 35%.
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