Many people believe that scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the government rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People have different views about whether scientific studies should be conducted by
government
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or individual
corporation
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corporations
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. While someone may disagree, I believe that
government
should be responsible for scientific study. Several reasons are put in place why
government
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the government
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should take charge of the research.
First
of all, it can be safe when a dangerous technology is developed by
government
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the government
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.
For example
, if private corporations can take part in the development of nuclear weapons, it is extremely dangerous and they may
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weapons to others in terms of benefits while
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the outcome it may bring to
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society.
Secondly
, the money spent by
government
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the government
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mainly comes from
the
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taxes.
Therefore
, it is possible for every
citizens
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to enjoy the advantages of a novel
science
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finding. If it is carried out by
companies
, only the rich can have the chance to benefit from it.
Nevertheless
, I would have to agree that there are
also
some benefits when scientific studies are carried out by personal
companies
. The main advantage may be that a useful scientific result can make direct profits so that more job opportunities
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given to not only scientists but
also
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ordinary
oridinary
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ordinary
people. Since a company
also
need people who take charge of sale or other
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support
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. What is more, it is more efficient to conduct a
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research
reseach
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research
program
by
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companies
. Less money can be wasted and more
finding
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findings
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may be obtained through a large investment. In conclusion,
although
there are some benefits
for
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carrying out research programs by
companies
, I believe it is better for
government
to take
the
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responsibility
of
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scientific research.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • socially responsible outcomes
  • corporate profit
  • profit motives
  • fundamental areas
  • long-term societal development
  • innovative research outcomes
  • mixed approach
  • stifle innovation
  • bureaucratic processes
  • breakthrough projects
  • commercial gain
  • scientific progress
  • public access
  • government funding
  • private sector
  • public benefit
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