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Recent advances in medicine have resulted in an increase in life expectancy over the past four years. Do you think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is phenomenal
development
 in the field of science and technology that provides more chances for people with underlying critical health conditions to survive. From my perspective, there are many positive sides to
this
development
 and fewer negative points.
This
 essay will discuss both sides in detail with factual information. The main benefit of
this
 advancement is that now medication can help people to recover and bring them back to life. Many cancer patients died in the past centuries because it was uncurable, now scientists have found a solution to cure
such
 disease,
hence
 many precious lives are out of danger now. Another benefit is in the past four years there a drop in the death ration especially amount those who have underlying health conditions
thus
 it is proven in previous research that it really beneficial
development
 in
this
 history of mankind and saved many precious lives.
However
 there are fewer drawbacks of
this
 advanced
development
 procedure is quite painful and
in addition
 to it, it takes much time in curing the illness. For a cancer patient,
for example
, therapies
is
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 much more painful than
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an individual and it takes 4-5 therapy sessions to recover fully.
Furthermore
, the procedure is too expensive not everyone can afford it,
hence
, much time and financial resources are required to get
this
 treatment done. To sum up, without any trouble it is an outstanding
development
 made by the medical professionals and they are saving lives with a good percentage but not everyone can afford
such
 expensive and painful treatment.
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