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In many countries, the crimes rate amongst underaged people has been rising. Discuss the causes and solutions for this problem.

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The role of youngsters decides the future of their nation.In
this
 contemporary Era,the ever leap of infractions has become a tremendous issue in our world.There are manifold factors that have contributed to
this
 problem;in fact,it is possible to overcome the problem by adopting effective means.
To begin
 with,there are two main grounds causing the enigma of illegal
acts
.
Firstly
,when youngsters get an interaction distant from their parents,they stand a chance to spend their time with bad habit people.
Furthermore
,they tend to be attracted to their activities and take them as an enjoyment ;
consequently
,leading to their bad performance in society
such
 as unlawful
acts
, violations and malefaction.To cite an example,a recent survey demonstrated that China has less percentage of illegal
acts
 as
compare
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compared
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 to any other country.Because they have a keen eye on their offspring and spend as much time as they can with them.
As a result
, of these rationales Connot be wrong to promote
this
 case. In order to cope with
this
 constantly_evolving problem,there are voluminous solutions that could be taken into consideration.
Therefore
,it is commonly accepted that the government should make strict policies in order to cope with teenagers; all in all,place cameras on any single street to avoid violations.
Moreover
;equally imperative, that parents tend to know about the activities and friends circle of their children,
thus
 leading to their good performance in society .
For instance
,improving crime policies and adding topics on illegal
acts
 in their syllabus can help to cope with
this
 bone of contention.
As a result
 improvement in these subjects has brought about more chances to reduce teenage offences. In the nutshell,the trend of letting their youngsters do whatever they want could cause parlous problems and the best measure to solve the trouble is to keep inspecting their company.
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