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Recent advances in medicine have resulted in an increase in life expectancy over the past four years. Do you think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The latest development in
medicine
 helped many human
lives
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 expectancy in
last
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 four years as per the survey. I would agree that there are
lot
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 of advantages than
the
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disadvantages
disadavantages
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disadvantages
 in
development
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 of modern
medicine
. The
formost
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foremost
advantages
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is
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treatment
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 of
cancer
 and organ transplantations. In early times, The
people
 who were affected by
the
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cancer
isolated
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 and
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 of them died because they did not have the proper medication and guidance at that time.
People
 were afraid to talk with
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cancer
 patients they
were
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blindly believed that they
also
 would get the disease but
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now days
nowdays
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 there are
lot
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 of social programs
arranging
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 by the government to educate
the
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people
 about
cancer
 and not
to
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ignore
the
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cancer
 patients.
Moreover
, the recent improvement in
medicine
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 technology to find out the symptoms too early to cure the disease as well as treat the disease became very easy. It was
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lack
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 in the early period of time. In
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addition
additon
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addition
, organ
transplantions
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transplantations
transplantation
transplants
 helps many
people
 to start their life once again
,
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 Because
people
 were used to
live
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their whole life with
diabilties
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disabilities
 like without legs, hands, and eyes.
People
 were used
commit
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to commit
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 suicide
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because
becuase
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because
 they could not accept their disabilities.
However
, In Present times
people
 can easily
do
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the
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implant
the
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artificial organs. If someone tragically
loss
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 their organs in
accidents
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accident
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 they can easily get
the
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organ
transplations
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translations
transplantations
. To conclude
this
 topic, I strongly agree that the recent developments in
medicine
 improved
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life expectancy and the advantages outweigh the disadvantages
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