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In the future, it seems it will be more difficult to live on the Earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planets to live, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Ghenh Rang is the
first
 top tourist destinations in Binh Dinh. Ghenh Rang (Vietnamese: Gềnh Ráng) is one of the most attractive destinations in Binh Dinh, located 3km south east of Quy Nhon City. It has magnificent natural scenery with mountains, forests, beaches and islands that can’t be seen in
such
 a combination anywhere else. At the southwest are high mountains that reach the ocean, and from these mounts you can survey great distances of natural beauty: the Lion’s Head rock that leaps to reach the sea; the silent Waiting Statue; the Lying Elephant and Bear rocks that guard the beaches; and Chong Islet which seems to be light, but is stable in heavy storms. On the northeast of Ghenh Rang is a blue ocean that covers the white sandbanks with cool water and a stunning view.
This
 is one of the most beautiful beaches in Binh Dinh, and has greeted bathers in search of relaxation for many years. In 1927, Bao Dai, the
last
 king of Vietnam, built a villa where his family could come and relax. He reserved the whole
beach
 for just Queen Nam Phuong, his most beloved wife. It is because of
this
 that the
beach
 is now called Queen
Beach
. From the view on the top of the mountain, the
beach
 looks like a large turquoise field filled with jade and granite eggs. And so, apart from “Queen’s
Beach
”, the local people
also
 call it “Egg Stone”
beach
.
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