Some people believe that cell phones should be for personal use only; others, however, feel cell phones should be used mostly for work. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In today's modern world, technology has become a big part of
the
people's lives, especially, cell Correct article usage
apply
phones
. While,
it is a topic of great discussion whether Remove the comma
apply
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mobile
moblie
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mobile
phones
should be used only for personal use
or for work I believe they play an important role in both these categories.
Phones
play a keystone role in our private lives as nowadays, it helps us to connect to our loved one in a matter of seconds through calls and even provides us with the Correct your spelling
privilege
privilage
to talk face to face with someone who is Correct your spelling
privilege
a
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apply
thousands
of Change the noun form
thousand
kilometers
away with features like video calling. Change the spelling
kilometres
For instance
, my brother who is in Australia facetimes
home Correct your spelling
facetime
wheneven
he misses us, Correct your spelling
whenever
when even
hence
, making this
huge distance of
Australia from India nearly negligible. Change preposition
between
This
invention has brought us all closer.
It is quite a known fact that mobiles were invented to save our
time and Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
their Remove the article
apply
use
in the field of work has proved it right. Although
, sometimes jobs they
can prove to be a distraction Correct pronoun usage
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but
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its
advantages surely Correct pronoun usage
their
overshadows
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overshadow
this disadvantage
as workers Fix the agreement mistake
these disadvantages
use
them to send reminders for meetings,tasks
, Correct word choice
and tasks
use
it
to make important calls, stay updated about their Correct pronoun usage
them
surrounds
and many more things. An example of Replace the word
surroundings
this
can be how Correct your spelling
a lot
alot
of the Correct your spelling
a lot
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work-related
work related
announcements and messages are sent to the employees Add a hyphen
work-related
in
their Change preposition
on
phones
. In some cases, the salary of employees is also
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transferred
tranferred
via their Correct your spelling
transferred
phones
which is a Correct your spelling
convenient
convinient
and safe method.
To summarize, just like any other technological invention cells Correct your spelling
convenient
also
have many cons but considering how big its
positive impact on our daily lives in terms Correct pronoun usage
their
for
both personal Change preposition
of
use
and job related
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job-related
use
is I believe that they are an inseparable part of our modern society.Submitted by nina on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite