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There is a growing demand for fresh water nowadays and this is becoming a global problem. What are the causes and solutions?

#demand #water
In recent times, the world's population
increase
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, and
people
 require
water
 consumption is increasing with it. it becomes a considerable issue, that
people
 confront.
This
 essay will
first
 suggest the biggest problems caused by
this
 phenomenon is that rising diseases and inhibiting daily basis work and
then
 argue that
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pollution reduction plan and
impose
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the
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law
for
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 companies
those
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who
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damage
water
 are the most viable solutions. The foremost issues caused by individually
people
waste
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 a
lots
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 of
water
 without knowing the importance of natural resources and business companies contaminate
water
 resources because they dump their disposal things through
water
 pipes and left
them
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 lakes, rivers and oceans. That way,
people
 will exposure to harmful chemicals through
water
 consumption.
As a result
, it can affect
human's
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 well-being. In the future
people
 have to face devastating problems because these contribute
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a lots
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 of issues.
For instance
, around the world,approximately 00.2% of fresh drinking
water
 have, and it not enough to
consumption
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 with
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growing population. Some possible solutions to these issues would
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to
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reduce the amount of pollution being
create
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 and enforce rules and regulations to prevent destructive
affect
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. companies would afraid to
left
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 chemicals because of implementing rules and regulations from the authority. Another option is that promote environmental education in schools that way children will
aware
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about
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 the danger and they would spread it
with
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 their
family
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 and others,
it
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 will help to mitigate
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affect
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.
For example
, in Japan,
people
 could not contaminate
water
 if they did have to pay
it
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. In conclusion, increasing the global population contribute to
water
 pollution and unhealthy life because human activity
has
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lead
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 to these causes and lower intellectual knowledge.
However
, the right method of techniques would aid to solve these impacts easily
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