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Task 1 general The cart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in england and Wales between 1918 and 2011 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant

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The given chart illustrates the percentage
between
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households
 in owned and rented
accommodation
 in two different countries in the UK over 93 years. Overall, the
households
 which owned privately relatively experienced
noticeable
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 increase over the time period.
In contrast
, rented
accommodation
households
 steadily decrease from time to time. In 2001, the household
accommodation
 owned by the natives ranked
first
 by almost 70%, whereas the lowest percentage
seen
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 in 1918 at 20%. After
rose
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 up around 10% from just over 20% in 1918 to approximately 30% in 1939, the chart remained steady in 1953.
Furthermore
, the owned household
accommodation
 went up constantly until 2001.
However
, in 2011 the percentage fell about 5% from nearly 70% to almost 60%. Citizens in England and Wales who rented
households
'
accommodation
 peaked in the
first
 year (1918) at nearly 80%. In 1939, the chart decreased by around 10% and remained the same in 1953. After that, it experienced a steady fall until 2001 which stood at just a little more than 30%. In the
last
 year, it slightly increased until it reached almost 40%.
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