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These days Internet –based courses have become a popular alternative to University – based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Having become an essential part of educational routine
computers
 are gaining popularity nowadays.
However
, the idea of using
computers
 in
education
 is embraced not by everyone. In
this
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 both views are discussed and the author’s opinion is given.
To begin
 with, there are some reasons for considering
computers
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usage
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 as a positive trend in
education
.
Firstly
, attending classes or submitting assessments without commuting is rather comfortable, which could be hardly possible without
computers
, - especially for disabled people or remote areas.
Secondly
, online libraries, search engines, and encyclopedias have become available thanks to
computers
.
Finally
,
computers
 make educators more accessible
for
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 students.
Nevertheless
,
computers
 can negatively affect the
education
 workflow and participants. The
first
 negative outcome seems to be
such
 health troubles as poor vision, back troubles or even cyber addiction developed by students after years spent in front of the screen. The
second
 problem is learners’ non-ability to comprehend,
to
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think critically and independently, relying on multiple opinions given. Drawing a conclusion, I would like to express my opinion on whether
computers
 influence
education
 positively or negatively. I am absolutely convinced that
computers
 have contributed much to
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faster, more comfortable and more efficient learning.
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