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More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other items with famous brands. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

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The majority of people tend to purchase utility goods
such
 as vehicles and
apparels
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apparel
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 of well-known brands for the desire for higher product quality and reliability. In the following paragraphs, I am going to illustrate the reasons for
this
 phenomenon and the reasons why I consider it to be a positive development.
To begin
 with, goods
of
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 famous labels are more durable than these
of
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 middle-range labels.
Moreover
, famous manufacturers have to keep improving their production processes to maintain their brand’s reputation.
On the other hand
, avoiding fraudulent advertising is the other reason. Take BMW, one of the best brands in the vehicle industry,
for example
,
this
 company invests
billions
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 dollars in manufacturing annually to provide its
customers
 with high-end
products
 and superior service.
Thus
, there are a great number of
customers
 enticed to buy vehicles of BMW for safety assurance and luxury driving experience.
In addition
, it has positively affected our society. Because all manufacturers are willing to offer high-quality
products
 to
customers
, people can enjoy
good
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 valued
merchandises
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.
For instance
, in the fashion industry, renowned manufacturers not only have to spend effort on designing clothes but need to invent artificial leather which is more environmentally friendly to attract vegetarians.
Therefore
, there are more
products
 made with sustainable materials we can purchase on the market. In conclusion,
products
 of well-renowned brands tend to be more durable and reliable which appeals to more and more
customers
.
This
 has positive influences on the market because people can have better choices to choose from.
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