Although families have influence on a children’s development, factors outside the home play a bigger part in their lives nowadays. To what extent do you agree oisagree?

These days, growing up as a child has more
impact
from aspects outside the family.
Children
having more a sociale live beside school.
Also
the world is bigger
then
school and home for them because the use of
internet
. I completely agree that
children
having more people guiding them because their spend more time outside the house. I
also
believe that the social media having
impact
on
children
.
Firstly
,
children
having a busy schedule beside going to school. By doing outside activities,
children
get in contact with others.
For example
: going to a soccer club. By going to a soccer club the
children
having practice 3 times a week and a game in the weekend. That means more than 6 hours outside the house with other kids and coaches.
Secondly
, the
internet
has a big
impact
on
children
. They get a lot of information from there what has an effect on them.
For example
: by playing video games or using social media. It seems that
children
very sensitive for what they learn from the
internet
.
This
has an big
impact
on their state of mind and can have a negative
impact
on them. In conclusion, as a parent you have still some controle in the development on your
children
but there are other factors to consider. Especially, the use of
internet
has big
impact
on
children
.
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