With growing population in cities , more and more people live in homes with little or no outdoor space . Do you think this is a positive or negative developement?

I believed that most people build
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house
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with little space nowadays. Because of that the children in the
home
, do not play outside due to adequate space.
This
can leads them to health problems by watching TV, playing video games etc. In the following paragraphs, I will describe some of the important points that a
house
built with few spaces has a lot of disadvantages than advantages. In old days, homes has been built with a lot of space them around. So that the children can play outdoor games with their friends around the
home
.
For instance
, since ,childhood I have been living in a
house
with little areas around it. Usually, I would not play activities outside
instead
of that I watch T.V. another problem is, I am a less social person.
This
weakness is due to the above-said lines in the paragraph. Nowadays, technology is developing day by day. Most of the areas are constructed with roads.
Therefore
, people get fewer areas to build a
home
. The population is growing drastically now and all of the people like to have their own
house
, I think
this
is
also
the main reason to be considered. In conclusion, according to my ,thoughts the
house
builds without any area around it. It can make every person in a homeless socialised, less fitness of the body and
also
the safety of the children is reduced by playing games outside their
home
.
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