You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. In some parts of the world people try to find out one's own family history. Why do people do this? Do you think it is a positive or negative? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

In some
countries
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it is a common practice for
people
to track down their bloodline's
history
.
People
give different motivations as to why they do it. I
suppport
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support
this
activity for reasons I will
further
explain in
this
essay.
To begin
with, some
people
want to get information about their family's
history
just
of
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out of
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pure interest. It can be a great hobby for someone to invest their time and
enegry
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energy
into. It will help
one
destress and have some fun, while
also
enrichening his area of
knowledege
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knowledge
.
In addition
to having something entertaining do to in their free time,
one
will learn a lot about what his family has been
thorugh
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through
long before he was born.
This
is really important because without our
anscestors
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ancestors
we would not have been born or
in other words
- without the
past
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there would be no future. If
one
respects his family and himself enough, he should learn about who they were and where they came from.
Furthermore
, learning about
one
's family
history
can be very
benefitial
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beneficial
in finding your talents.
For instance
, if someone finds out that in the family there once was someone who was
great
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a great
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footballer,
then
this
is something
one
should try out.
Geneticaly
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Genetically
, some
people
are born with specific talents, predisposing them to
pursuit
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a
ceratin
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certain
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career path. Being aware of your family's past can be a great hint towards your
strenghts
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strengths
and weaknesses. In conclusion, finding out your family's
history
is not only a fun hobby that you can do in your spare time
,
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but,
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it can
also
assist you in finding your talents in life without having to always try out new activities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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