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The gap between the rich and the poor has been enlarged in recent years. What are the causes and solutions for this problem?

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There is no doubt that now
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 days
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differences
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 between wealthy individuals are being increased day by day . There are
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 of
reasons
 which
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 big trouble. one of them is lack of education and
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other
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 is unawareness
due to
 less mutual understanding among people.
This
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 these causes and solutions to mitigate
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 in upcoming paragraphs.
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 with the
reasons
. There are two main
reasons
,
Firstly
 is the lack of education
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 of
this
 so many
persons
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 are being deprived from study . The major cause is improper government system and source of study.
As a result
 of
this
 , Growth and development do not possible at any rate. So
that is
 why they can not explore
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themself
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 in any region of the country and
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 down every day.
Secondly
 ,
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Unawareness
 and lack of mutual understanding
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is the big way to inclined the poor rate in certain country and
difference
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the difference
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 is being increased between moneyed and
needy
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the needy
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. Both of the categories are helpless to create trust with each other. They cannot share their
poinions
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opinions
opinion
 and ideas with each other , outcome would be different mindsets in
two
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the two
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 parties. Some solutions can be adopted to solve these issues, One is that higher authorities could be played a crucial role to improve it . They can be planned various
seminar
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seminars
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 and programs to aware
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people against productivity . Regimes can be raised the funds in form of
scholorships
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scholarships
 and awards in schools.
Moreover
 ,
Richest
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the Richest
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 persons can
also
 be
the
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part of
this
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such
 as they can donate some of their incomes towards needy people. Because of it, mutual understanding would be created.
However
, if both parties would be
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,
better
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 society and equality would be made and
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 we can
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 a better world.
To conclude
, The essay highlighted the
reasons
 behind the gap
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 poor educational
backgroud
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background
 and
unawreness
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unawareness
 which is the stone in
path
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the path
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 of growth and development and
also
 presented the solutions are twofold:
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source
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 of education , knowledge and mutual understanding in form of seminars and programs.
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