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Some people say international sports event help in world peace? Do you agree or disagree?

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Sports
 have existed around the world since early the early cradle of human civilization. People play
sports
 for exercise purposes
as well as
 to promote group-to-group relationships. In an age of political turmoil, international
sports
events
 can play a significant role between adversary
nations
 by building up channels channel for open dialogue.
This
 essay will argue that international
sports
 event has an undoubtedly positive impact on world peace.
To begin
 with, the door for communication between different
nations
 often gets shut off
due to
 economic or military conflict. And the international relation can exacerbate when respective countries refuse to talk to each other. On
this
 matter, international
sports
events
 can at least establish interaction on the civilian level by allowing
sports
 teams and fans to gather together and celebrate. And
then
,
nations
 can use
this
 event of celebration as a thruster to fix the broken relationship. Evidently, It was an effective way of starting a diplomatic relationship between China and the U.S.A in the early 80s when both countries agreed to have a public Ping Pong match.
Additionally
,
sports
events
 can not only be the icebreaker, but
also
 they can reduce the tension between competing
nations
. When the cold war was in the heat of escalating into nuclear warfare, the U.S.A and U.S.S.R had decided to host a basketball game between their national teams.
As a result
, A catastrophic outcome was avoided by making the leaders and people realize that
sports
 can be a common ground. Once the common ground was found, different cultural groups are able to
hence
 cherish humanity rather than destroy it. In conclusion,
sports
events
 have been historically proven to be profoundly important between different countries. The realisation of how peace is humanity's priority
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