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The increase in mobile phone use in recent years has transformed the way we live, communicate and do business. Mobile phones can also be the cause of social or medical problems. What forms do these problems take? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of mobile phones?

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It is well known that in the
last
 couple of years, the mobile phone industry has had a huge impact on human life. It can not be denied that the technological improvements in mobile companies have changed how
people
 live, interact and
work
.
However
,
this
 fast development has triggered social disorders and medical issues in human life. I strongly believe that the benefits are greater than the disadvantages because many
people
 can achieve higher freedom and
work
-life balance, but at the same
time
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 there are social challenges to go
trought
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through
. through
Due to
 the creation of mobile
work
 applications, employees have the ability to choose when they want to
work
 and where
instead
 of being 8 hours in the office every day.
For instance
, I have been
traveling
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 and working overseas for the
last
 8 years combining my passion for surfing, and at the same
time
 being able to keep fluent communication with all the staff
while
 I was checking the waves or discovering the different cultures. The advantage of having a mobile phone allowed me to reply instantly if any of my teammates had any questions or needed my help.
On the other hand
, some
people
 might feel that they spend
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 much
time
 using their mobile phones and find it hard to disconnect from
work
.
This
 could be a challenge
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I learned
that
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is not always essential to reply, and some situations are not urgent and can be dealt with later or the following day.
Therefore
,
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this
 kind of
work
 remote
environments
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, everyone understands that
the
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personal life
it
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is as much important as
work
.
This
 downside of being socially connected all the
time
it
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is a new perspective that many
peoply
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people
 needs to learn and integrate to get a better
work
-life balance. In conclusion,
this
 essay compared the benefits of using mobile phones and how these can help to increase
the
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communication at
work
 and provide freedom, but it can be tough to deal
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people
 do not have the
neccesary
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necessary
 experience to find the right balance and
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 socially impacted. Personally, I think by using a mobile phone I have the opportunity to take breaks from
work
, and if I feel I want to go to the beach because is a
beautifull
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beautiful
 day I will still be able to get
notice
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 if someone needs me at
work
.
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