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Task 1 (Sample answer): The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

Task 1 (Sample answer): The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The provided bar chart depicts the compression of buying or renting houses in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
1918
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 the
rented
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number of rented
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 households
was
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were
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 raised
about
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by about
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 78
percentage
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per cent
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.
Then
 it
leveled
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levelled
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of
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off
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 between 1939 to 1953. From 1961 to 1981 it
dramaticly droped
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dramatically dropped
 to 35
percentage
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per cent
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.
This
 accommodation
stated
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stayed
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 the same until 2001. In 2011 there was a slight increase in rented households and it was up to 38%. The same
yeas
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year
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 the owned ones has raise from 21% to 32% in 1918 to 1953.
In
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From
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 1939 to 1953 the was a graduate stade in the percentage.
Then
 it starts to
leveled
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level
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 up to 69% In 1991.
At
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From
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 2001 to 2011 there was a decline in the owned accommodation and it was 62%.
Genarally
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Generally
, both
of
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apply
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the rented and owned households
has
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have
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 raised and
droped throug
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dropped through
 the years from 1918 to 2011. The was a year that
the
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they
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 were the same
prectarge
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precharge
 and it was 1971 which 50%.
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