The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her Say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party Explain why you won't be able to attend the party Give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time

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Dear uncle, I hope you are in pink

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and in

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health. I got

happy

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a happy

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shock after hearing the news of

birthday

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the birthday

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celebration of Chris in India. Undoubtedly, Chris will be on cloud nine by celebrating his birthday because he will get

chance

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to meet all his childhood friends,

as well as

,he will

recieve

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receive

blessings

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the blessings

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of their

grand parents

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grandparents

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. I am really desperate that, I won't be able to attend the birthday event ,as I have to go to Ahmedabad to get done my biometrics.

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, I have emailed them

give

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another appointment,

but

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they have refused it.

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, I have no choice other than be present on

same

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day .

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, once I get back

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home after that,I will take him out and we will

rome

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come

around the places, where we used to play in

the

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college days. I am sure he will

fell

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over the moon .

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, I want

this

to keep confidential.

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, don't share the plan with him. My apologies for not being there on

special

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day of Chris.Give my kind regards to

aunty

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. Yours sincerely Zarna Dobariya.

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The parents of your Australian friend Chris have invited you to a surprise birthday party for him/her Say why you think Chris will enjoy the surprise party Explain why you won't be able to attend the party Give details of a plan to see Chris at a different time

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Doctors in many countries are saying that people are not getting enough physical exercise. What are the causes of this and how it can be addressed?

Some believe that men and women are equal and so women are able to do any job they want. Others feel that men women are not equal and therefore there certain jobs that are not suitable for women. What is your opinion

Organising a large family celebration such as a wedding can often create problems. What can be the problems associated with organising a large family event and what solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Write about the following topic. Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.