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In recent days, there is an inclination that a lot of news programs concentrate on the negative information, though there are some beneficial improvements in the country. There are those who think that this tendency would generate adverse impacts on a person and many social groups

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In recent days, there is an inclination that a lot of news programs concentrate on
the
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negative information, though there are some beneficial improvements in the country. There are those who think that
this
 tendency would generate adverse impacts on a person and many social groups. I partially agree with
this
 view, and the reason will be elaborated
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 the enlisted paragraph.
Firstly
,
this
 inclination would inhibit
the
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new invention or
evolvement
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.
This
 is because individuals cannot touch the positive developments, and it would lose the occasion that inventors come up with the ideas.
According to
 the thesis done in 2018, 20% of Japanese companies came up with new business from TV shows in 2005,
however
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 there was a slight decrease in the rate of companies from 2005 to 2018 because employees could not obtain beneficial news from television.
Thus
,
people
 and some organizations got some destructive effects. Another key point that I would like to emphasize is the fact that
people
 cannot believe other
people
 because they always watch bad problems on TV and it would make distance
among
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 them.
For instance
, the number of children who stop learning activities
such
 as soccer or baseball slightly increase in Japan because they watched some bullying news on the internet.
Hence
, relationships among the
people
 would be downgraded by
this
 inclination. In conclusion.,
although
 the tendency that the media shows negative information rather than good advancement
have
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 some advantages, it would create
bed
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 results
on
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 the individual and many communities.
Therefore
, I completely agree with the statement.
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