The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.

The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.
The charts provide information about the
overall
spending of people on various needs in a European country in two different years. The
overall
expenditure on goods showed notable changes between the two periods, mainly in food, travel & transport, and luxury goods. A number of commodities and services represented an increasing trend of spending from 1958 to 2008. The housing portion rose significantly by 10% during the time period. Meanwhile, people's purchases of luxuries and travel and transportation doubled by 2008,
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about 17% each. 
On the other hand
, there are products for which purchasing has decreased in the target period. Food illustrated a distinct drop in the spending average, from 32% in 1958 to 12% in 2008. Clothing,
however
, showed a slight change from 18% to 16% by the end of the period. Expenditures on entertainment
also
presented a decreasing trend in 2008 of about half the spending of 1985.
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