Today's essay topic: *People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and illegal drugs, and at an increasingly early age. Some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse.*

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in the right way ,
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can be very dangerous if people start to use
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medical
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observation
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drugs
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abuse are
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serious issue that threat society and it is one of the most and high dangerous
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many countries suffer from and
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very old and complicated . It is often assumed that young people start to addicted
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drugs
because
whether
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they
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learned
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from their parents or the most popular way in my opinion which is the bad friend. we all know that young people spend much time with their
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which can lead to
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illegal
drugs
as fun and just for try in the
beging
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beginning
then
to serious addiction
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can lead to cause a different disease
relited
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related
to mental health , much less
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a
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money and job . everyone
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responsible
responsable
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responsible
to fight youth drug abuse and help the government
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many ways
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for example
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on drug dealers , In additional
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a
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rehabliation places
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rehabliation
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rehabilitation
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the addicted can go and get the right treatment .
in
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conclusion illegal
drugs
and
drugs
dealers will continue to harm our society and we should stand
togather
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together
to look out
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