Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there is more advantage to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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this
ultra-modern
world
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there is multiple
option
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of
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accomodation
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accommodation
such
as
house
,
appartments
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apartments
apartment
and condos. Many
people
likes
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to live in
house
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a house
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whereas
other believe that living in
flat
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a flat
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is more beneficial. There are pros and cons of living in both.
This
essay will
further
discuss both the benefits and drawbacks. Analyzing and
further
explaining the benefits of living in
house
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the house
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. The significant advantage is size and privacy.
people
have their own privacy as they own
house
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houses
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they can live how they want without worrying about
neighbour
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. To explain , children can play how they want in their
home
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homes
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.
In addition
, the size of
house
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the house
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is another benefit.
For example
,
family
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a family
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with three children can have their own rooms and wide space to put their belongings. other than that backyard and
frontyard
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front yard
provided
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with
own
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their own
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house
so
people
can spend their time with family and friends doing various activities. But disadvantages
comes
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with the benefit, because of inflation price of home is getting higher.
Moreover
,
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the maintainance
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maintainance
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maintenance
of
house
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the house
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is costly as gas, hydro and electricity have to pay by
owner
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of the
house
.
On the contrary
, living in buildings have its own pros. The first and foremost is affordability and maintaining cost.
appartments
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apartments
is cheaper than
the
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house
so many
people
choose to stay in flat.
Further more
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, maintaining
cost
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costs
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is low as
number
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a number
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of
appartments
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apartments
is more in buildings so
overall
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cost is divided.
Secondly
, if you are
social
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animal
than
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then
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suits are the best place to live as the society
organise
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organises
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many events and functions on
festivels
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festivals
. To
examplify
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exemplify
, in
india
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property manager of
building
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a building
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arrange garba(traditional dance) in
navratri
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.
However
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there are certain drawbacks to
stay
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staying
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in
appartments
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apartments
such
as privacy
as well as
not
spacious
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being spacious
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. By agglomerating all the points
afformentioned
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aforementioned
above , there are certain benefits and drawbacks of living in
appartments
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apartments
and
house
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houses
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.
House
provides space and freedom
whereas
appartments
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apartments
are
cose
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more
effective to live in.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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