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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Statistics show that the world's population is increasing rapidly. It is expected that most of us will be living in
cities
 within the next few decades. The question of whether urbanisation is a positive or negative development remains controversial. A rapid influx of people moving from rural to urban areas is bound to cause
problems
.
Firstly
, pressure on resources
such
 as housing and transportation intensifies. It is becoming difficult for many people to afford adequate housing in
cities
. A by-product of
this
 is the creation of slums causing low-income families to group together in neglected parts of the city. These people often become trapped in a cycle of poverty
that is
 difficult to escape. As mentioned above, the growth of urban areas can
also
 lead to severe traffic congestion because more and more vehicles travel into the city from the suburbs.
This
 has many knock-on effects,
such
 as
problems
 with air quality. It
also
 leads many city dwellers to experience mental health issues because travelling across large
cities
 is tiring and stressful. All of
this
 being said, I don't believe that urbanisation is a wholly negative development. There are advantages to living in large
cities
 that are
well managed
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.
For example
, there are more schools which means more education opportunities. Access to higher-quality health care is often better in
cities
. Some
cities
 have
also
 introduced ride-sharing, e-bikes and
part
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 and ride services that reduce environmental
problems
. My opinion is that many of the
problems
 associated with urbanisation are avoidable but dealing with increasing populations in
cities
 is a formidable challenge. How governments, businesses and society respond to
this
 challenge will dramatically affect the future of our world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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