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Some people tend to take temporary jobs (they only work for few months of year), for they have time to do other things. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays certain folk usually prefer flexible job offers to permanent ones since it avails them the opportunity to have a better work-life balance. Even though, it might have some demerits the merits still support it because the public needs more than one source of income and
also
, to
further
 their education.
Firstly
, humans' daily obligations are ever-increasing so in order to stay abreast of
this
 pressure, most individuals engage in multiple revenue sources. Unfortunately,most employers are paid peanuts when compared to the responsibilities they shoulder so they embark on different professions in order to provide efficiently for their families.
For instance
 in Nigeria, most teachers sell palm oil in the local market after school hours in order to augment their salaries. They should be encouraged.
Secondly
, earning more professional qualifications
such
 as MSC is the key to more attractive employment offers or promotions around the globe,
as a result
, most people choose to work part-time as
this
 has a less rigid schedule and at the same time gives time for schooling.
For example
, in Nigeria to secure an attractive grade level in a federal firm requires not less than a degree which is the basic reason individuals prefer to work as casual staff until they secure a college diploma or degree.
To conclude
,
although
 permanent employment comes with some disadvantages the advantages still outweigh
due to
, time fast changing so the public now chooses temporary offers since it allows them to run other businesses
as well as
 advance academically.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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