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some people believe that culture will be ruined if it is used to earn tourism revenue, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting culture. discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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It is often said
that is
 one of the fastest-growing industries in the world .
However
, its impact on
culture
 remains a source of constant debate.
This
 essay will elaborate on both the positive and negative effects of
tourism
 from a cultural perspective. On the one hand, the
tourism
 industry can have precious consequences for
culture
 . When
tourists
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 indifferent to the national and cultural beliefs of the people and show behaviours that are against the customs of that
country
 , they can create a pleasant feeling for residents. Over time,
this
 type of problem can lead to a slowish imitation of the
culture
 of
tourists
 and a rapid change in the lifestyle of the natives
due to
 cultural invasion, which results in the loss of identity and cultural prejudice and price. It can
therefore
 be argued that
tourism
 revenues can create cultural and social conflicts.
On the other hand
, studies have shown that
tourism
 not only brings capital and income to the
country
 but
also
 is the best way to protect a
country
's
culture
. In tourist areas, cultural exchanges with
tourists
 can create a friendly and peaceful relationship between races and religions, and the host community tries to accept and learn other languages to communicate more with
tourists
. The prevalence of
tourism
 in a
country
 , in my opinion , can revive and conserve forgotten legends, arts, crafts and local customs . Despite all these ,
tourism
 can help people's cultural awareness and ameliorate their living standards. In conclusion, I can accept that
tourism
 can have many positive and negative aspects of
culture
, but it seems to me that tourist trade is absolutely vital for identifying and exchanging
culture
.

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